Here's the context. Our young heroine is eating at Sizzler (of course) with her parents who tell her that the family is moving. The character panics. Which sentence better describes her reaction?
This? "I thought I might spin away if I didn't grip the table's edge."
Or this? "I grabbed the table's edge so I wouldn't spin away."
That was my bit of revision today. I changed the first sentence into the second because it occurred to me I should have my character DOING instead of THINKING about doing. I'm surprised by how much I do that, actually--make things too interior, which just. slows. everything. down.
On the food front, I think I might be over cupcakes.